Albert is 11 years old. He was born on 1st of may 1998. He goes to Verdala International school. He is Swedish and has lived in Sweden for 6 years living in different places in between. He has also been to India and Antigua.
Albert Mum is called Martina and his dad Mattias. He also has a little sister call Sigrid and a cat called Tiger that lives in Sweden.
Albert has many hobbies which are basketball, swimming, table tennis, football and cycling. Albert loves football the most though. He is very good at it.
Interviewing Albert was fun and I have only known him for one and a half years now. But I know more about him.
In English class our assignment today was to do an introduction of our next seat neighbour. I interviewed Michael and this is what I found out.
Michael is 11 years old and comes from Russia. He has got a brother called Dima and he is 4 years old. Michael likes to play with Dima. When Michael grows up he wants to become a teacher in Malta. He has got two turtles but his favourite animal is lion. His favourite colour is orange.
Michael loves to swim. He has got a wonderful pool at home and is in the water all the time. When he is not in the water he reads. Michael reads thin and thick books, in Russian and in English. He also likes to play football and basketball. In Russia he played basketball and played well.
It was fun to interview Michael because he is new in the class so I did not know a lot of things about him, but now I do.
Isabella is a 6th grader.She is currently in 6A at Verdala International school, Malta.She enjoys school.Her favorite teacher is Ms. Giudice, her mum and her favorite subject is Eenglish.
Isabella is quiet short.She is around 1.5 metres tall.She has long, brown hair and brown eyes.She is 11 years old.
Isabella's favorite animal is a dolphin, and least favorite is the tarantula.She likes turquoise, but she dosn't like brown.She prefers listening hip hop, rather than classical music.
The three things that she enjoys doing is : drawing, singing, and writing.The three things that she doesn't enjoy doing is : doing her chores, cleaning up after her dogs, and washing the dishes.
I think Isabella is kind and she could be a good friend.She can keep secrets and she doesn't bully anyone.
I interviewed Amber on the 22nd and 23rd September 2009. I’ve known her since September 2008 when I started at Verdala.
Amber has dark hair and brown eyes. She was born in Malta in 1997 but moved to Canada, with her family, when she was young. Then she moved back to Malta where she has been ever since.
She has one brother called Tyler and a stepbrother and a stepsister (she doesn’t know their names). Her mum is called Michelle and is 47 years old. She is Maltese. Her dad is called Jonathan and is 52. He was born in Canada. She has more than twenty cousins.
Amber’s favourite music group is The Black Eyed Peas and her favourite book is “The English Roses” by Madonna. Her favourite film is “Titanic”. Her favourite clothing brand is VANS.
Her scariest nightmare was when she was stuck in a cave with her mum about to be eaten by crocodiles. When she got most scared was when she was going to the bathroom in the night and thought the curtain was a ghost. She scared her brother the most when he was listening to music and she surprised him.
Well I learned quite a lot and you’ve probably learned a lot about Amber as well.
Max is a new student at Verdala so it was good to find out about him.
His name is Max Ripley and he is turning 12 on Christmas Day, 25th December. He has just moved to Malta a few weeks ago and is living at the Hilton until he finds a house.
His favourite foods are pizza and pasta. He enjoys sports very much and his favourite is football. He loves to watch movies especially The Simpsons and his favourite car is a Lamborghini. I found out some more of his favourites like place is London, colour is red, TV programme is Drake & Josh and electronics is his Xbox 360.
He has a twin sister, Katie and an older brother called Luke. They both go to Verdala too. His dad is Andy (he works with my dad at HSBC) and his mum is Shoola.
I had great fun interviewing Max so hopefully you will get to know him more.
Luke, 1. I think that your interview with Amber was really good. What works is the part about her favorite thing and the nightmares. 2. My suggestion is that you could have put in about Amber in the introduction then it would have been even better.
1.I think your essay was very good and everything worked except for the introduction. 2.I think that your intro. is too short and that you need to make it longer and more interesting.
Dear Albert, 1.I think your introduction was great.It was so different to the others,that what I liked it. 2.a bit of a strange ending,you could make it a bit longer.
To Charlotte, 1.The interview about Albert was fantatic and also his hobbies were as well. 1.Keep up the great work but............ 2.What does he look like and when did he jion VIS?
Luke W, 1.You found out lots of infomation about Amber but the best part was the nightmare becauese you had lots of interesting facts about the nightmare. 2. You should make the introdutiona bit longer but well done
Albert, 1.i liked the second paragraph the best because it told you alot about him. 2. You could have put when he was born but otherwise it was good :)
All about Denis Meet Denis. Denis has dark brown hair and brown eyes. He’s eleven years old. He is Ukrainian and lived in Mariupol, Ukraine. He’s a good friend and it was interesting to get to know him a bit more. The following is all about Denis. Denis’s happiest memory was the 5th Grade graduation last June. He won the Headmaster Award! Go Denis! His best birthday was when he turned eleven, when he invited some of his closest friends over. These are Denis’s favorite things. His favorite type of weather is a sunny day. He loves winter and his favorite number is 13. Denis’s favorite food is sushi, and his favorite drink is Kinnie. Denis’s favorite color is green. He loves soccer/football. His favorite movie is “Home Alone” and his favorite book is the “Horrible Histories” series. And these are the hypothetical coming up! If Denis’s house was burning down, he would only save…MONEY!! If he had a wild animal as a pet, he would have a snake. Denis would be an eagle if he was any animal in the world. If Denis would speak any three languages, he would speak Spanish, French, and German. Denis would be a raspberry bush because he loves raspberries! Denis likes Malta because there are nice beaches, good weather, and because it’s a good country. Denis currently doesn’t have any pets, but his latest pet was a budgie, but it died. His lucky number is the unlucky number, 13! Denis is very smart in math, social studies and in other areas in academics. He looks very smart with his glasses! As I said before, I enjoyed writing about Denis and I hope he enjoyed writing about me! Even when we don’t get along, he is still a fun person to converse with. Thank you for reading my comment!
All about Denis Meet Denis. Denis has dark brown hair and brown eyes. He’s eleven years old. He is Ukrainian and lived in Mariupol, Ukraine. He’s a good friend and it was interesting to get to know him a bit more. The following is all about Denis.
Denis’s happiest memory was the 5th Grade graduation last June. He won the Headmaster Award! Go Denis! His best birthday was when he turned eleven, when he invited some of his closest friends over.
These are Denis’s favorite things. His favorite type of weather is a sunny day. He loves winter and his favorite number is 13. Denis’s favorite food is sushi, and his favorite drink is Kinnie. Denis’s favorite color is green. He loves soccer/football. His favorite movie is “Home Alone” and his favorite book is the “Horrible Histories” series.
And these are the hypothetical coming up! If Denis’s house was burning down, he would only save…MONEY!! If he had a wild animal as a pet, he would have a snake. Denis would be an eagle if he was any animal in the world. If Denis would speak any three languages, he would speak Spanish, French, and German. Denis would be a raspberry bush because he loves raspberries!
Denis likes Malta because there are nice beaches, good weather, and because it’s a good country. Denis currently doesn’t have any pets, but his latest pet was a budgie, but it died. His lucky number is the unlucky number, 13! Denis is very smart in math, social studies and in other areas in academics. He looks very smart with his glasses!
As I said before, I enjoyed writing about Denis and I hope he enjoyed writing about me! Even when we don’t get along, he is still a fun person to converse with. Thank you for reading my comment!
INTRODACTION ABOUT A CLASSMATE The introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her. I understood that she considers herself a person with wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: running, computer, swimming and tennis. Most of them are sports, so she’ an active person. Her favourite film is “Yes-man” and she likes to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite food is chips and chicken. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer. Her family contains of four persons. They are: father, mother, her sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. They are living in Malta for three years. If she goes to the long journey she takes with her teddy bears. And as an animal she would like to be a dog. I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope she’ll score a success in the future.
This is Océane and she is in my grade. She is a bit of a tom boy because she likes to play boys’ games especially football and baseball.
Océane has a twin brother and she is Dutch. She has two step sisters and a nice dad and mum. Their names are Jacques and Loraine. She has a dog and bird.
Océane likes tennis, running and basketball and she is hoping to be a surgeon when she is older. Océane lived in Curacao before Malta and she loves it here.
Océane is 11 years old and her birthday is on the 10th May.
James, ADVANTAGES: 1. That's great that you mentioned Max's favourites and hobbies. 2. That's also good that you wrote about his family. DISADVANTAGES: 1. It would be better not to write sir names(only because privacy) 2.In future I advise you to write a little bit more introduction and conclusion. Good job!
I interviewed Luke Brint to find out about him. He was born on the 26 March 1998 so he is 11 years old. Luke has lived in Malta for 9 years and he has 2 brothers, one older and one younger.
Luke's favourite hobbies are playing ripstick and tennis. He also has an XBOX 360 and his favourite game at the moment is Call of Duty 5. Luke likes to listening to music especially Led Zeplin and he likes watching films. One of the films which he has enjoyed the most is King Kong. When he has time to watch television he particularly likes Sponge Bob which is a funny programme.
Luke's favourite animal is a dog although I didn't ask what breed. His family have pets in the house. They have a dog and a cat, but I don't know if he had them at the same time. Also a pigeon and a rabbit. I've never known anyone to have a pigeon as a pet before.
Pasta is his favourite meal and he is not allowed to eat diary products as I think he has an allergy. Surprisingly he likes the colour purple which is a calming and bright colour - a bit like Luke. If Luke could have any job in the future, he said that he would love to be an artist which is something that Luke is very good at. I think this would suit him alot.
Amber 1. liked it alot espeacially the PATTY bit HAHA! 2. I didnt know football was actually spelt footqall and this word i dont know what it mean it says cthlec...... form charlotte XD
Amber Luke W (Patty) Luke Wilkinson is 10 he likes footbqall and his favorite color is orange. He moved 3 times and if he could live anywhere it would be mississippi, he like the shoe make Quick Silver and he is Cthlec,
He was born in England and his moms name is Tamsin and his dads name is sturt.He likes swimming but not in P.E,he never fainted and he thinks the world would in 2012.
He is a boy he likes Malta he wants to ecome a tennis playerand play in the olympicst that what he siad. If he was in the olyimpics he thinks that he would come 3rd place.
2.You SHOULD make it LONGER!I think it is TOO SHORT and you could maybe describe her appearence and favorites and i think that 99 words isn't enough!!!!!
James Robertson is my friend,he has been at Verdala for four years now. His favourite hobbies are football and cricket. I think James would be a good sports man because he is always trying to improve his skills at sports. His favourite colour is yellow.
James has one little brother called Max, a dad called Alister, and a mum called Nicola. His favourite band is Black eyed pies!His favourite car is a Ferrari.
James favourite movie is star wars. His best friend is Max Ripley and Max Richards. He was born on April 25th,1999. His favourite teacher is Mr.M.
James favourite food is pizza Margarita. His favourite T.V is star wars clone wars. I really like interviewing James Robertson and hope to interview some one again!
Today I would like to tell you about a boy named Alexander Aquilina who is in my class. He came to the school at Easter of grade 4. Alex is his nickname. Alex is 10 years old, he will turn 11 on the 17th of December. Alex is half English and half Maltese. Alex has a lot of hobbies. He really likes Baseball, Tennis, Drawing and his favourite Golf. When he grows up he wants to be an Architect or a Pilot. He likes Porshe, the car. Alex’s favourite colour is green. He enjoys seafood. He also likes Sushi. His favourite subject at school is Math. He doesn’t really like science. He doesn’t like going to school but he doesn’t mind it either. Alex has one sister called Ann. She is very polite. She likes high School Musical. Alex’s mom is called Samantha, but most people call her Sam. Sam is usually bringing the kids to school and picking them up. Sam plays taxi every day. His dad’s name is Nigel. He is also very polite. Nigel is a dentist. His office is in Mosta near the big church. Alex also likes playing the WII. The WII is a videogame with different kinds of games. I really liked writing about Alex, because he was polite answering my interview questions. I also liked it because he was always thinking about the questions I asked him. I tried my best to help you to know Alex and his family better, I hope you do.
I liked yours, but it was a bit short. There was one part that i didnt get...the part where you talk about 2012 and luke never fainting. But it was good! <3 <3 <3 :)
INTRODACTION ABOUT A CLASSMATE The introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. She will be twelve on the twentieth of May. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her. She has bright hair and her eyes are blue. She’s tall and active. She likes running a lot. She also takes everything with a smile. She is kind and helpful. I understood that she considers herself a person of wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: running, computer, swimming and tennis. Most of them are sports, so she’s trying to keep fit and healthy. Her favourite film is “Yes-man” and she likes to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite food is chips and chicken. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer. Her family contains of four persons. They are: father, mother, her sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. Her father’s occupation is “Bitter director”. They have been living in Malta for three years. If she goes to the long journey she takes with her teddy bears. I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope a success will follow her in the future.
Her name is Isabella Giudice. She has many nicknames such as : Is, Isie, Isiebella, Fizzy, Fizzybella and Naf Naf.
Her hobbies are singing, writing, and drawing. Her favorite food is Asian food, specifically Dim sum.Her favorite drink is Dr.Pepper, for its fruity flavour. Her favorite color is turqoise blue. Her favorite clothes to wear are confortable light clothes. She has two Boxer dogs called Lucas and Lola, two fish and two turtles. She loves the movie Love guru because, she thinks it's really funny which im gonna have to agree!! Her favorite music is Hip Hop and Pop.
Now, if her house caught fire the one thing she would grab is Lucas the dog because, Sebastian her older brother would probably take Lola her other dog. If she could travel anywhere in the world she would go to Alaska, USA because she likes the animals, plus the wild atmosphere! If she could have any random super powers she would have water powers.We dont know why so we havent figuered that out yet! If she could be any flower she would be an Orchid because she loves the name , plus its her favorite flower. If she could be any animal in the world she would be a dolphin so she would travel to the Carribean, the Bahamas and Florida! She would like to be an Actress or a Veterinarian because she loves animals plus she is a realy good actress! Facts: Born: 24/5/98 Eyes: Green Hair: Brown Height: 1.44 I think that she is a really good friend because i've known her since third grade!!If you get to know her better I think that she is a great friend!! By: Celine Schmid
You need an introductory "opening" paragraph that lets your reader know what you will be doing in the essay as a whole. Just saying "This is my introduction" isn't enough. Try telling us what areas you will be discussing (facts about him, his family, his hobbies). I know that you have been redrafting this since this draft, so you probably have more that you might want to say in your opening paragraph.
I think that you could also fill in more information about both Albert's family and his hobbies that you learned in your interview "follow-up" questions. Maybe you even want to directly quote Albert.
Your conclusion paragraph is heading in the right direction. Go further!
You obviously conducted your interview very well and got lots of great information!
For a second draft, you need to take all this information and to organize it into paragraphs. This introduction needs to sound less like a list, and more like an essay.
Think about how you want to arrange this information and try writing it in paragraphs with sentences that are not all so similar. Then write an opening paragraph that gives your reader an overview of what you will talk about and a closing paragraph that lets us know your personal reaction to learning about Isabella.
Meet Isabella. Isabella has long, brown hair and green eyes. She is very short, around 1.5 meters tall. She is 11 years old. She is Spanish, French and also American. She was born in Florida in 1998 and lived there four and a half years. Here you can find out more about Isabella.
Isabella’s happiest memory was when she graduated from Elementary last June. Her saddest memory was when her great grandmother died. Her best birthday was when she turned 6. She had a princess party and she dressed herself in a princess costume.
Isabella has 4 family members which include her, her mom, dad and older brother. Her brother’s name is Seb, her father’s name is Alain and her mother’s name is Elena. Her mum is a PSHE teacher at Isabella’s school. Verdala International School in Malta. She also has two dogs : Lucas and Lola, two turtles : Forrest and Gumpy, and two goldfish : Twix and M&M.
Now I will tell you Isabella’s favorites. Her favorite type of weather is rainy day. She loves winter, and her favorite number is 3. Isabella’s favorite food is Asian, especially noodles, and her favorite drink is coke. Isabella’s favorite color is turquoise. She likes Tennis and Swimming. Her favorite type of music is “hip-hop”.
Her favorite book is called “Nancy Drew” series and her favorite movie is Love Guru. Her favorite singer is Michael Jackson, and her favorite song is “Disturbia” by Rihanna. Her favorite animal is the dolphin. If she could be any tree, bush or flower, she would be a cherry tree, because she likes cherries. If she could speak any three languages except from English, she would like to speak Spanish, Chinese, and Aztec.
I enjoyed interviewing Isabella, and I also learned a lot of new things about her, which I didn’t know before. Isabella is very kind and she could really help someone when they’re in a bad situation. I hope you enjoyed reading my writing and thankyou for reading my Introduction.
The introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. She will be twelve on the twentieth of May. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her. She has short fair hair and her eyes are blue. She’s tall and active. She also takes everything with a smile. Charlotte is kind, helpful and artistic. It’s nice that she’s easy-going and friendly. She doesn’t normally like to let her bad moods and anger inside her come out and affect other people. Charlotte is in the sixth grade at the moment. She has been learning in “Verdala” school for three years and she enjoys it a lot. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer. I understood that she considers herself a person of wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: computer, sports and reading. She tries to keep fit and healthy. She’s interested in winter and summer games. But her favourite ones are: running, tennis, swimming, snowboarding and skiing. She prefers to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite film is “Yes-man”. Her family consists of four persons. They are: a father, a mother, an elder sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. Her father’s occupation is “Betting director”. They have been living in Malta for three years. I think Charlotte is happy in this peaceful island because the people are very helpful and friendly. And the climate is warm and healthy. I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope a success will follow her. By Michael
This is a strong draft and I'm sure your final draft will be even stronger. You have the right idea about how to structure this essay. You are both opening and closing in a way that makes sense, but both your opening and closing paragraphs need to say a bit more. Try to make them both three or more sentences. In your opening you can say a bit more about what you will be discussing in the essay. In your closing, you can go into further detail about why you enjoyed interviewing Max.
The three paragraphs of your essay's "body" are also very well structured, but could go a bit further too. Include anything else you may have learned in your interview about general facts about Max, his favorites and his family and expand these paragraphs.
Nice job, Michael! Is this your final draft, or are you going to go even further with it? When you have a final draft, could you submit it to the new blog entry I have made? I hope you are having a great weekend!
I see that you have already submitted a final draft, so won't say anything more about this draft than to say that you have done a very strong job on this project. I look forward to your oral report!
This is a strong draft! I have a feeling that you are very close to the word minimum, so perhaps you would like to say a little bit more. When you have a final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new entry I have put on the blog. I look forward to your oral presentation. Have a great weekend!
Nice draft! I think that you could still go further in both your opening and closing. Could you? When you have finished your final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new blog entry I have made.
The draft here is still quite short, but I know that you have been working on it this week. Be sure to include an "opening" paragraph where you give an overview of what you will be discussing and a "closing" paragraph where you may want to talk about your own general reaction to conducting the interview and to writing this project. I lok forward to your final draft and to your presentation.
Nice draft! My feeling is that you could still go even further in your opening and closing. Could you? When you have written the final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new blog entry I have made. I look forward to your oral report!
The draft here is still quite short, but I know that you have been working on it this week. Be sure that in the final draft you meet the word minimum (250 words). Also try to include a good "opening" paragraph where you give an overview of what you will be discussing in the whole essay and a "closing" paragraph where you let your reader know your own reaction to interviewing and learning about James.
This is my Introduction to Albert
ReplyDeleteAlbert is 11 years old. He was born on 1st of may 1998. He goes to Verdala International school. He is Swedish and has lived in Sweden for 6 years living in different places in between. He has also been to India and Antigua.
Albert Mum is called Martina and his dad Mattias. He also has a little sister call Sigrid and a cat called Tiger that lives in Sweden.
Albert has many hobbies which are basketball, swimming, table tennis, football and cycling. Albert loves football the most though. He is very good at it.
Interviewing Albert was fun and I have only known him for one and a half years now. But I know more about him.
In English class our assignment today was to do an introduction of our next seat neighbour. I interviewed Michael and this is what I found out.
ReplyDeleteMichael is 11 years old and comes from Russia. He has got a brother called Dima and he is 4 years old. Michael likes to play with Dima. When Michael grows up he wants to become a teacher in Malta. He has got two turtles but his favourite animal is lion. His favourite colour is orange.
Michael loves to swim. He has got a wonderful pool at home and is in the water all the time. When he is not in the water he reads. Michael reads thin and thick books, in Russian and in English. He also likes to play football and basketball. In Russia he played basketball and played well.
It was fun to interview Michael because he is new in the class so I did not know a lot of things about him, but now I do.
By Albert
23rd September 2009.
ReplyDeleteIntroduction to a classmate.
Isabella.
Isabella is a 6th grader.She is currently in 6A at Verdala International school, Malta.She enjoys school.Her favorite teacher is Ms. Giudice, her mum and her favorite subject is Eenglish.
Isabella is quiet short.She is around 1.5 metres tall.She has long, brown hair and brown eyes.She is 11 years old.
Isabella's favorite animal is a dolphin, and least favorite is the tarantula.She likes turquoise, but she dosn't like brown.She prefers listening hip hop, rather than classical music.
The three things that she enjoys doing is : drawing, singing, and writing.The three things that she doesn't enjoy doing is : doing her chores, cleaning up after her dogs, and washing the dishes.
I think Isabella is kind and she could be a good friend.She can keep secrets and she doesn't bully anyone.
By Denis :)
Amber Franssen by Luke Wilkinson
ReplyDeleteI interviewed Amber on the 22nd and 23rd September 2009. I’ve known her since September 2008 when I started at Verdala.
Amber has dark hair and brown eyes. She was born in Malta in 1997 but moved to Canada, with her family, when she was young. Then she moved back to Malta where she has been ever since.
She has one brother called Tyler and a stepbrother and a stepsister (she doesn’t know their names). Her mum is called Michelle and is 47 years old. She is Maltese. Her dad is called Jonathan and is 52. He was born in Canada. She has more than twenty cousins.
Amber’s favourite music group is The Black Eyed Peas and her favourite book is “The English Roses” by Madonna. Her favourite film is “Titanic”. Her favourite clothing brand is VANS.
Her scariest nightmare was when she was stuck in a cave with her mum about to be eaten by crocodiles. When she got most scared was when she was going to the bathroom in the night and thought the curtain was a ghost. She scared her brother the most when he was listening to music and she surprised him.
Well I learned quite a lot and you’ve probably learned a lot about Amber as well.
Meet Max Ripley by James Robertson
ReplyDeleteMax is a new student at Verdala so it was good to find out about him.
His name is Max Ripley and he is turning 12 on Christmas Day, 25th December. He has just moved to Malta a few weeks ago and is living at the Hilton until he finds a house.
His favourite foods are pizza and pasta. He enjoys sports very much and his favourite is football. He loves to watch movies especially The Simpsons and his favourite car is a Lamborghini. I found out some more of his favourites like place is London, colour is red, TV programme is Drake & Josh and electronics is his Xbox 360.
He has a twin sister, Katie and an older brother called Luke. They both go to Verdala too. His dad is Andy (he works with my dad at HSBC) and his mum is Shoola.
I had great fun interviewing Max so hopefully you will get to know him more.
James,
ReplyDelete1.Your favorites work, and the family description too.
2.I think that you should improve the introduction, nad maybe describe Max's appearence.
Luke,
ReplyDelete1. I think that your interview with Amber was really good. What works is the part about her favorite thing and the nightmares.
2. My suggestion is that you could have put in about Amber in the introduction then it would have been even better.
From Charlotte
2.Albert I thought it was good you that you interview Michael therers alot to learn about him .
ReplyDelete1.you could write alittle bit more about him lol
Dear James,
ReplyDelete1.The thing that worked was the favorite paragragh.
2.You could inmprove the start.
Luke.
Charlotte
ReplyDelete1 I think everything worked.
2 I think you could write a little bit more about his family and about himself.
By Albert
To: Charlotte
ReplyDelete1. His family info, his pets, and where he used to live and also his hobbies.
2. Maybe you could add some of his favorite things?
From, Isabella
1 i thiught it was good
ReplyDelete2 you could write alittle more
amber to charlotte
Albert
ReplyDelete1.most things were good
2.Tell us what he looks like
Denis
ReplyDelete1.Very good
2.Where was she born?
Charlotte
ReplyDelete1.very good about Albert
2.When did he come to VIS
Denis,
ReplyDelete1.The middle was cool.
2.You could improve the introduction.
Dear charlotte,
ReplyDelete1.It was mostly great.
2.The ending was sudden.
To James,
ReplyDeleteThanks, I'm answering your question : she was born in USA, Florida
i think))))
Denis
to Alberto
ReplyDelete1.I think your introduction was very good.)))
2.You could have wrote a bit more about Michael.)))
Denis)))
to Charlotte
ReplyDelete1.Albert's family, pets,hobbies, and the places he lived is very good.)))
2.Maybe you could what he likes and dislikes?)))
Denis
to Luke
ReplyDelete1.I think your essay was very good and everything worked except for the introduction.
2.I think that your intro. is too short and that you need to make it longer and more interesting.
Denis)))
Dear Albert,
ReplyDelete1.I think your introduction was great.It was so different to the others,that what I liked it.
2.a bit of a strange ending,you could make it a bit longer.
luke.
To Denis
ReplyDelete1. I liked your introduction of Isabella very much.
2. Don’t forget to hit the space bar after full stops.
Denis
ReplyDeleteYes she was
To Luke
ReplyDelete1. Yes I learned a lot about Amber as well.
2. You shouldn’t write anyone else’s surname.
To Charlotte,
ReplyDelete1.The interview about Albert was fantatic and also his hobbies were as well.
1.Keep up the great work but............
2.What does he look like and when did he jion VIS?
ALbert,
ReplyDelete1.His hobbies were brilliant
2.Tell us more about his family and what does he look like? Great job Albert.
Luke W,
ReplyDelete1.You found out lots of infomation about Amber but the best part was the nightmare becauese you had lots of interesting facts about the nightmare.
2. You should make the introdutiona bit longer but well done
To James
ReplyDelete1. James I really liked your interview.
2. For you as well shouldn’t use someone else’s surname
Guys And Girls,
ReplyDeleteDid we have to do a the table for science homework on pgs. 2-3?Please answer.
Denis
Denis,
ReplyDelete1. I liked it alot
2. You could of put in a little bit more in the conclusion
from charlotte :)
P.S yes we did hav eto do pages 2-3 :)
Albert,
ReplyDelete1.i liked the second paragraph the best because it told you alot about him.
2. You could have put when he was born but otherwise it was good :)
James,
ReplyDelete1. I liked it alot
2.You could tell us what he looked like
charlotte :)
JAMES HE CAME TO VERDALA IN GRADE 5!!!!
ReplyDeleteCharlotte :)
James,
ReplyDeleteyou have probably seen him at least a billion times but he has medium blonde hair, I think he has blue eyes.
Charlotte :)
All about Denis
ReplyDeleteMeet Denis. Denis has dark brown hair and brown eyes. He’s eleven years old. He is Ukrainian and lived in Mariupol, Ukraine. He’s a good friend and it was interesting to get to know him a bit more. The following is all about Denis.
Denis’s happiest memory was the 5th Grade graduation last June. He won the Headmaster Award! Go Denis! His best birthday was when he turned eleven, when he invited some of his closest friends over.
These are Denis’s favorite things. His favorite type of weather is a sunny day. He loves winter and his favorite number is 13. Denis’s favorite food is sushi, and his favorite drink is Kinnie. Denis’s favorite color is green. He loves soccer/football. His favorite movie is “Home Alone” and his favorite book is the “Horrible Histories” series.
And these are the hypothetical coming up! If Denis’s house was burning down, he would only save…MONEY!! If he had a wild animal as a pet, he would have a snake. Denis would be an eagle if he was any animal in the world. If Denis would speak any three languages, he would speak Spanish, French, and German. Denis would be a raspberry bush because he loves raspberries!
Denis likes Malta because there are nice beaches, good weather, and because it’s a good country. Denis currently doesn’t have any pets, but his latest pet was a budgie, but it died. His lucky number is the unlucky number, 13!
Denis is very smart in math, social studies and in other areas in academics. He looks very smart with his glasses!
As I said before, I enjoyed writing about Denis and I hope he enjoyed writing about me! Even when we don’t get along, he is still a fun person to converse with.
Thank you for reading my comment!
All about Denis
ReplyDeleteMeet Denis. Denis has dark brown hair and brown eyes. He’s eleven years old. He is Ukrainian and lived in Mariupol, Ukraine. He’s a good friend and it was interesting to get to know him a bit more. The following is all about Denis.
Denis’s happiest memory was the 5th Grade graduation last June. He won the Headmaster Award! Go Denis! His best birthday was when he turned eleven, when he invited some of his closest friends over.
These are Denis’s favorite things. His favorite type of weather is a sunny day. He loves winter and his favorite number is 13. Denis’s favorite food is sushi, and his favorite drink is Kinnie. Denis’s favorite color is green. He loves soccer/football. His favorite movie is “Home Alone” and his favorite book is the “Horrible Histories” series.
And these are the hypothetical coming up! If Denis’s house was burning down, he would only save…MONEY!! If he had a wild animal as a pet, he would have a snake. Denis would be an eagle if he was any animal in the world. If Denis would speak any three languages, he would speak Spanish, French, and German. Denis would be a raspberry bush because he loves raspberries!
Denis likes Malta because there are nice beaches, good weather, and because it’s a good country. Denis currently doesn’t have any pets, but his latest pet was a budgie, but it died. His lucky number is the unlucky number, 13!
Denis is very smart in math, social studies and in other areas in academics. He looks very smart with his glasses!
As I said before, I enjoyed writing about Denis and I hope he enjoyed writing about me! Even when we don’t get along, he is still a fun person to converse with.
Thank you for reading my comment!
September 28, 2009 7:42 AM
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ReplyDeleteTo: Albert
ReplyDeleteFrom:Isabella
I liked your introduction. I liked how you interviewed him about his family.
But maybe you should add more favorites to it. I think that can give a strong impact to it.
But I liked it:)
to Isabella
ReplyDelete1.Very good.everything works!
2.no comments, very good!
Denis
To Luke(Patty)
ReplyDeleteFrom: Isabella
I liked your introduction alot! I thought you put a lot of work into it.
One thing you should add is more favorites!! I'm very picky about that, I know, but I like reading everyone's likes and dislikes.
Great job! :)
INTRODACTION ABOUT A CLASSMATE
ReplyDeleteThe introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her.
I understood that she considers herself a person with wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: running, computer, swimming and tennis. Most of them are sports, so she’ an active person. Her favourite film is “Yes-man” and she likes to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite food is chips and chicken. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer.
Her family contains of four persons. They are: father, mother, her sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. They are living in Malta for three years. If she goes to the long journey she takes with her teddy bears. And as an animal she would like to be a dog.
I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope she’ll score a success in the future.
Michael
Denis,
ReplyDeletethanks for the comment!
but it's true, you do look smart with glasses!!
:)
from, Isie
what works charlortte
ReplyDeleteI like the way you put everything in a diverent section
Isabella,
ReplyDelete1. GREAT cool like it alot!
2.i really dont have any comments because you did nearly everything you could interveiw
charlotte :D
Denis,
ReplyDelete1.you might wanna recheck your work before you post it because you wrote a couple of things wrong!!
just a tip !!
albert
ReplyDelete1 The beginning was really good
2 I think a bit more in =formation would be good
Luke,
ReplyDeleteI think it was very creative to ask her about her nightmares! Titanic is a really sad movie, but i can see why amber likes it so much.
Michael
ReplyDelete1. Was really good! liked it alot
2. maybe you could do on how I look but over all i think it was great! :D
form charlotte :D
isie,
ReplyDelete1.The whole thing was great .
2.It was so good I don't have any suggestions!
Luke
To Isabella
ReplyDelete1 I think everything worked.
2 I can’t think of any suggestions. I liked it all
Isie!!
ReplyDelete1. dont worry im not gonna say anything wrong about your interview!!
2. It is really good!!
3. Keep it up!!
Charlotte,
ReplyDeletethankx for the lovely comment! I'll read yours now and ill write about it 2!
:):):)... <3 <3 <3
denis
ReplyDelete1 It was fun to read
2 wach out with yure spelling
Luke,
ReplyDeletethanks for the comment!
yours was great!
Oceane,
ReplyDelete1. nice comment to denis i wrote the same!!
weres yours cel I canot find it!!!!
ReplyDeleteCharlotte,
ReplyDelete1. what worked was the bit about the family
2. could of put what he looked like
from charlotte :D
michael
ReplyDelete1 i really like it
2 maybe talk about her pets a bit more
3 but overall I really like it
oh you wanna read mine!!! i didnt post it yet because i didnt finish i have one paragraph to go!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is Océane and she is in my grade. She is a bit of a tom boy because she likes to play boys’ games especially football and baseball.
ReplyDeleteOcéane has a twin brother and she is Dutch. She has two step sisters and a nice dad and mum. Their names are Jacques and Loraine. She has a dog and bird.
Océane likes tennis, running and basketball and she is hoping to be a surgeon when she is older. Océane lived in Curacao before Malta and she loves it here.
Océane is 11 years old and her birthday is on the 10th May.
by Alex
Mikhail,
ReplyDelete1.The ending was good.
2.the first sentence you spelt wrong
luke
Charlottie,
ReplyDeleteYour essay is GREAT!! A perfect start to the whole blog! keep it up.
I dont have any suggestions...
hehe
James,
ReplyDeleteADVANTAGES:
1. That's great that you mentioned Max's favourites and hobbies.
2. That's also good that you wrote about his family.
DISADVANTAGES:
1. It would be better not to write sir names(only because privacy)
2.In future I advise you to write a little bit more introduction and conclusion.
Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI interviewed Luke Brint to find out about him. He was born on the 26 March 1998 so he is 11 years old. Luke has lived in Malta for 9 years and he has 2 brothers, one older and one younger.
ReplyDeleteLuke's favourite hobbies are playing ripstick and tennis. He also has an XBOX 360 and his favourite game at the moment is Call of Duty 5. Luke likes to listening to music especially Led Zeplin and he likes watching films. One of the films which he has enjoyed the most is King Kong. When he has time to watch television he particularly likes Sponge Bob which is a funny programme.
Luke's favourite animal is a dog although I didn't ask what breed. His family have pets in the house. They have a dog and a cat, but I don't know if he had them at the same time. Also a pigeon and a rabbit. I've never known anyone to have a pigeon as a pet before.
Pasta is his favourite meal and he is not allowed to eat diary products as I think he has an allergy. Surprisingly he likes the colour purple which is a calming and bright colour - a bit like Luke. If Luke could have any job in the future, he said that he would love to be an artist which is something that Luke is very good at. I think this would suit him alot.
By: Max Ripley
max
ReplyDeletethat was very good
For Charlotte,
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting me. I'll follow your advice!
Michael
Amber,
ReplyDelete1. MIND YOUR SPELLING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Dear myself,
ReplyDelete1.Mine was so cool.Well done.
Luke
amber,
ReplyDeletegreat essay!
you might wanna watch your spelling. But everything else was great!
:) isie
Amber
ReplyDelete1. liked it alot espeacially the PATTY bit HAHA!
2. I didnt know football was actually spelt footqall and this word i dont know what it mean it says cthlec......
form charlotte XD
denis
ReplyDelete1 alryt
2 maybe a bit more
3 but it was good
Alex,
ReplyDeleteyours was really COOL!
Great job. I liked it so much, i have no suggestions because it was so good.
isie
To: Michael
ReplyDelete1. It was really good! Mind your spelling a bit...But other than that, it was great!
From, Isabella
Max,
ReplyDelete1. I thought it was really good :D
2.Ended suddenly :D
other wise it was really good
Charlotte :p
Amber Luke W (Patty)
ReplyDeleteLuke Wilkinson is 10 he likes footbqall and his favorite color is orange. He moved 3 times and if he could live anywhere it would be mississippi, he like the shoe make Quick Silver and he is Cthlec,
He was born in England and his moms name is Tamsin and his dads name is sturt.He likes swimming but not in P.E,he never fainted and he thinks the world would in 2012.
He is a boy he likes Malta he wants to ecome a tennis playerand play in the olympicst that what he siad. If he was in the olyimpics he thinks that he would come 3rd place.
alex,
ReplyDelete1.Everything worked!
2.You SHOULD make it LONGER!I think it is TOO SHORT and you could maybe describe her appearence and favorites and i think that 99 words isn't enough!!!!!
Your friend D.K.
To Isie
ReplyDeleteThank you for commenting me.
PATTY!!! Luke. Hey!
ReplyDeleteIsie or Alicia
alex
ReplyDelete1. It was good
2. You maybe could of put a little more :P
From charlotte :D
to charlotte i changed it now so take that lololololololol
ReplyDeleteMax,
ReplyDelete1.Yours was great.
2. The ending was a bit sudden.
Luke (the other one)
isie
ReplyDelete1 that was really good
2 the ending was alryt
but overall good
Denis
ReplyDeleteI like your discription on her family and hobbys is very good.
I would have discried her more.
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ReplyDeleteJames Robertson
ReplyDeleteJames Robertson is my friend,he has been at Verdala for four years now. His favourite hobbies are football and cricket. I think James would be a good sports man because he is always trying to improve his skills at sports. His favourite colour is yellow.
James has one little brother called Max, a dad called Alister, and a mum called Nicola. His favourite band is Black eyed pies!His favourite car is a Ferrari.
James favourite movie is star wars. His best friend is Max Ripley and Max Richards. He was born on April 25th,1999. His favourite teacher is Mr.M.
James favourite food is pizza Margarita. His favourite T.V is star wars clone wars.
I really like interviewing James Robertson and hope to interview some one again!
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ReplyDeleteMy introduction
ReplyDeleteToday I would like to tell you about a boy named Alexander Aquilina who is in my class. He came to the school at Easter of grade 4. Alex is his nickname. Alex is 10 years old, he will turn 11 on the 17th of December. Alex is half English and half Maltese.
Alex has a lot of hobbies. He really likes Baseball, Tennis, Drawing and his favourite Golf. When he grows up he wants to be an Architect or a Pilot. He likes Porshe, the car. Alex’s favourite colour is green. He enjoys seafood. He also likes Sushi. His favourite subject at school is Math. He doesn’t really like science. He doesn’t like going to school but he doesn’t mind it either.
Alex has one sister called Ann. She is very polite. She likes high School Musical. Alex’s mom is called Samantha, but most people call her Sam. Sam is usually bringing the kids to school and picking them up. Sam plays taxi every day. His dad’s name is Nigel. He is also very polite. Nigel is a dentist. His office is in Mosta near the big church. Alex also likes playing the WII. The WII is a videogame with different kinds of games.
I really liked writing about Alex, because he was polite answering my interview questions. I also liked it because he was always thinking about the questions I asked him. I tried my best to help you to know Alex and his family better, I hope you do.
By Océane Visser
30 September 2009
i think it was very good ocean
ReplyDeleteto amber
ReplyDeleteyou spelled my name wrong
isabella you go girl it was fab lol
ReplyDeleteTo:Amber
ReplyDeleteIsabella
I liked yours, but it was a bit short. There was one part that i didnt get...the part where you talk about 2012 and luke never fainting. But it was good! <3 <3 <3 :)
cel i changed it ok
ReplyDeleteyou are wellcome good day
never mind
AMBER U GO GIRL IT WAS FAB 2! LOL
ReplyDeletealex
ReplyDelete1 thanks for writing about me
2. A bit more would be good
Thank you max.
ReplyDeleteoh you are to kind did you get the cupcakes
ReplyDeleteAMBER WATCH YOUR SPELLING.
ReplyDeleteoceane,
ReplyDeleteI liked it alot ;)
2. Maybe try not to reapeat a phrase like he/she was very polite otherwise i enjoyed it :D
from charlotte xxDD
not yet but i got the skrinkles for the cupcakes!
ReplyDeleteluke
ReplyDelete1 it was good
2 a bit less space between the paragraphs would be good
i mean sprinkles
ReplyDeleteoh ok you are great thank you amber lee franssen canada
ReplyDeleteATTENTION CLASSMATES:
ReplyDeleteWE ALL DID GREAT WITH OUR COMMENTS!
GIVE IT UP FOR 6A!
i herd that
ReplyDeleteAMBER U WERE NOT ALLOWED TO INCLUDE YOUR LAST NAME AND WHERE U R FROM...ACTUALLY ONLY WHERE UR FROM AND UR FIRST NAME BUT NOT YOUR LAST!!!
ReplyDeleteBEWARE
To Amber:
ReplyDeleteI think yours was very good but you need to check your spellings.
to albert
ReplyDelete1 nice story
2 you could write a bit more about him
sarah u upset amber by telling her her spelling was wrong!!
ReplyDeleteto amber MIND YOURE SPELLING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletestop it isie im waching you
ReplyDeleteno problem i wrote the same that you wrote to amber
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ReplyDeleteamber watch your spellings
ReplyDeleteceline it was good but you could write a little bit more
ReplyDeleteBUT IT UPSETS HER IN A FUNNY WAY OCEANE!!
ReplyDeleteamber
ReplyDeletewatch youre SPELLING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
isie
ReplyDeletego teace amber haha
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ReplyDeleteamber check your spellings
ReplyDeleteteace?! it's tease and no im not teasing amber.
ReplyDeletehaha sarcastically
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ReplyDeletejames
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless.
james
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless.
luke so what
ReplyDeletejames
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless
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ReplyDeleteOctober 1, 2009 1:39 AM
james
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless.
james
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless
INTRODACTION ABOUT A CLASSMATE
ReplyDeleteThe introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. She will be twelve on the twentieth of May. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her.
She has bright hair and her eyes are blue. She’s tall and active. She likes running a lot. She also takes everything with a smile. She is kind and helpful.
I understood that she considers herself a person of wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: running, computer, swimming and tennis. Most of them are sports, so she’s trying to keep fit and healthy. Her favourite film is “Yes-man” and she likes to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite food is chips and chicken. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer.
Her family contains of four persons. They are: father, mother, her sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. Her father’s occupation is “Bitter director”. They have been living in Malta for three years. If she goes to the long journey she takes with her teddy bears.
I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope a success will follow her in the future.
james
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless
james
ReplyDeletethat coment is pointless
Her name is Isabella Giudice.
ReplyDeleteShe has many nicknames such as : Is, Isie, Isiebella, Fizzy, Fizzybella and Naf Naf.
Her hobbies are singing, writing, and drawing.
Her favorite food is Asian food, specifically Dim sum.Her favorite drink is Dr.Pepper, for its fruity flavour.
Her favorite color is turqoise blue.
Her favorite clothes to wear are confortable light clothes.
She has two Boxer dogs called Lucas and Lola, two fish and two turtles.
She loves the movie Love guru because, she thinks it's really funny which im gonna have to agree!!
Her favorite music is Hip Hop and Pop.
Now, if her house caught fire the one thing she would grab is Lucas the dog because, Sebastian her older brother would probably take Lola her other dog.
If she could travel anywhere in the world she would go to Alaska, USA because she likes the animals, plus the wild atmosphere!
If she could have any random super powers she would have water powers.We dont know why so we havent figuered that out yet!
If she could be any flower she would be an Orchid because she loves the name , plus its her favorite flower.
If she could be any animal in the world she would be a dolphin so she would travel to the Carribean, the Bahamas and Florida!
She would like to be an Actress or a Veterinarian because she loves animals plus she is a realy good actress!
Facts:
Born: 24/5/98
Eyes: Green
Hair: Brown
Height: 1.44
I think that she is a really good friend because i've known her since third grade!!If you get to know her better I think that she is a great friend!!
By: Celine Schmid
Comment me!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteGREAT COMMENT CELINE!!! EVERYTHING WORKED!!!!!
ReplyDeleteamber,
ReplyDelete1.Cool!
2.watch that spelling!
luke
Charlotte,
ReplyDeleteYou need an introductory "opening" paragraph that lets your reader know what you will be doing in the essay as a whole. Just saying "This is my introduction" isn't enough. Try telling us what areas you will be discussing (facts about him, his family, his hobbies). I know that you have been redrafting this since this draft, so you probably have more that you might want to say in your opening paragraph.
I think that you could also fill in more information about both Albert's family and his hobbies that you learned in your interview "follow-up" questions. Maybe you even want to directly quote Albert.
Your conclusion paragraph is heading in the right direction. Go further!
Cel,
ReplyDeleteYou obviously conducted your interview very well and got lots of great information!
For a second draft, you need to take all this information and to organize it into paragraphs. This introduction needs to sound less like a list, and more like an essay.
Think about how you want to arrange this information and try writing it in paragraphs with sentences that are not all so similar. Then write an opening paragraph that gives your reader an overview of what you will talk about and a closing paragraph that lets us know your personal reaction to learning about Isabella.
Michael,
ReplyDeleteYou have lots of good information here!
As you work on a final draft, think about how you are organizing your paragraphs. You might want to move some of your sentences around.
I like your conclusion. Could you take it a bit further?
You still need to write a good "opening" paragraph that lets your reader know what you will be doing in your essay.
HELLO PPL :DDD
ReplyDeleteHi PPl! :):):):):D:D:D:D:D
ReplyDeleteISABELLA!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteDO NOT FORGET TO BRING A PICTURE OF YOURSELF!!!!!
I NEED IT TO PUT ON THE POSTER!!!!!!
BRING IT!!!!!
PLEASE!!!!!
DENIS!!!!!
Introduction to a classmate.
ReplyDeleteIsabella.
Meet Isabella. Isabella has long, brown hair and green eyes. She is very short, around 1.5 meters tall. She is 11 years old. She is Spanish, French and also American. She was born in Florida in 1998 and lived there four and a half years. Here you can find out more about Isabella.
Isabella’s happiest memory was when she graduated from Elementary last June. Her saddest memory was when her great grandmother died. Her best birthday was when she turned 6. She had a princess party and she dressed herself in a princess costume.
Isabella has 4 family members which include her, her mom, dad and older brother. Her brother’s name is Seb, her father’s name is Alain and her mother’s name is Elena. Her mum is a PSHE teacher at Isabella’s school. Verdala International School in Malta. She also has two dogs : Lucas and Lola, two turtles : Forrest and Gumpy, and two goldfish : Twix and M&M.
Now I will tell you Isabella’s favorites. Her favorite type of weather is rainy day. She loves winter, and her favorite number is 3. Isabella’s favorite food is Asian, especially noodles, and her favorite drink is coke. Isabella’s favorite color is turquoise. She likes Tennis and Swimming. Her favorite type of music is “hip-hop”.
Her favorite book is called “Nancy Drew” series and her favorite movie is Love Guru. Her favorite singer is Michael Jackson, and her favorite song is “Disturbia” by Rihanna. Her favorite animal is the dolphin. If she could be any tree, bush or flower, she would be a cherry tree, because she likes cherries. If she could speak any three languages except from English, she would like to speak Spanish, Chinese, and Aztec.
I enjoyed interviewing Isabella, and I also learned a lot of new things about her, which I didn’t know before. Isabella is very kind and she could really help someone when they’re in a bad situation. I hope you enjoyed reading my writing and thankyou for reading my Introduction.
By Denis.
INTRODUCTION ABOUT A CLASSMATE
ReplyDeleteThe introduction will be about Charlotte. She’s from England. And she’s eleven years old. She will be twelve on the twentieth of May. An interview wasn’t very long and I got a very good time interviewing her. And it was really interesting. I got a lot of new information about her.
She has short fair hair and her eyes are blue. She’s tall and active. She also takes everything with a smile. Charlotte is kind, helpful and artistic. It’s nice that she’s easy-going and friendly. She doesn’t normally like to let her bad moods and anger inside her come out and affect other people.
Charlotte is in the sixth grade at the moment. She has been learning in “Verdala” school for three years and she enjoys it a lot. Her favourite subjects are: English, PE and Computer.
I understood that she considers herself a person of wide interests. She has a lot of hobbies and interests. They are: computer, sports and reading. She tries to keep fit and healthy. She’s interested in winter and summer games. But her favourite ones are: running, tennis, swimming, snowboarding and skiing. She prefers to read fiction books. Her favourite books are those which are written by Jacqueline Wilson. Her favourite film is “Yes-man”.
Her family consists of four persons. They are: a father, a mother, an elder sister and she. She said me that she is very happy with her family. Her father’s occupation is “Betting director”. They have been living in Malta for three years. I think Charlotte is happy in this peaceful island because the people are very helpful and friendly. And the climate is warm and healthy.
I learnt a lot about her and I hope she liked my questions too. I think in the future she will be a doctor and I hope a success will follow her.
By Michael
James,
ReplyDeleteThis is a strong draft and I'm sure your final draft will be even stronger. You have the right idea about how to structure this essay. You are both opening and closing in a way that makes sense, but both your opening and closing paragraphs need to say a bit more. Try to make them both three or more sentences. In your opening you can say a bit more about what you will be discussing in the essay. In your closing, you can go into further detail about why you enjoyed interviewing Max.
The three paragraphs of your essay's "body" are also very well structured, but could go a bit further too. Include anything else you may have learned in your interview about general facts about Max, his favorites and his family and expand these paragraphs.
Nice job, Michael! Is this your final draft, or are you going to go even further with it? When you have a final draft, could you submit it to the new blog entry I have made? I hope you are having a great weekend!
ReplyDeleteDenis,
ReplyDeleteI see that you have already submitted a final draft, so won't say anything more about this draft than to say that you have done a very strong job on this project. I look forward to your oral report!
Océane,
ReplyDeleteThis is a strong draft! I have a feeling that you are very close to the word minimum, so perhaps you would like to say a little bit more. When you have a final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new entry I have put on the blog. I look forward to your oral presentation. Have a great weekend!
Albert,
ReplyDeleteI see that you have already submitted a final draft. Nice work! I look forward to your presentation!
Luke,
ReplyDeleteNice draft! I think that you could still go further in both your opening and closing. Could you? When you have finished your final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new blog entry I have made.
Amber,
ReplyDeleteThe draft here is still quite short, but I know that you have been working on it this week. Be sure to include an "opening" paragraph where you give an overview of what you will be discussing and a "closing" paragraph where you may want to talk about your own general reaction to conducting the interview and to writing this project. I lok forward to your final draft and to your presentation.
Isabella,
ReplyDeleteNice draft! My feeling is that you could still go even further in your opening and closing. Could you? When you have written the final draft, please submit it as a comment to the new blog entry I have made. I look forward to your oral report!
Luke B,
ReplyDeleteThe draft here is still quite short, but I know that you have been working on it this week. Be sure that in the final draft you meet the word minimum (250 words). Also try to include a good "opening" paragraph where you give an overview of what you will be discussing in the whole essay and a "closing" paragraph where you let your reader know your own reaction to interviewing and learning about James.